Copy Reading: Developing Communication Skills, Enhancing English Proficiency

Ganito Ka Rin Ba Mag-ENGLISH?

October 1996

To Marije,

I am not surprise or wander why Dennis leave you why? What reason can you think about but you’re very fat body. I thought before that Dennis only use me to his toy but sooner and later I’m realize that he really can’t not beared or stomached to be with you anymore because at first, Dennis say he could not stand you’re habit of making pakialam all his walks (lakad) and always calling to their house what he go home or this or that.

And then he say he get ashame to me either in school or in his family and then asking you to exercise you’re very very, very fat body. But you hate it. Thought you’re the most preetiest girls he knows about. What do you think you are “Beautiful Girl” of Jose Marie Chan?

Even you are beautiful face (to your think) you do not have the right to called me whatsoever or else difference name one time or the other for the real purposed to insults my personality because I’m never call you names either in front of Dennis or in the backs of Dennis, but if you start already to calling me different name, I don’t have any other choice but to call you other different name to. Like you are a PIG, FAT, OBESSED, OVERWEIGHT, AND UGLY SHAPE girl. Shame to you’re body that is to a BUDING.

You can’t not blame Dennis for exchanging you to me because I am the more sexier that you when you look to us in the mirror. I’m repeat again that you are like Ike Lozada when she is a girl.

Love,

The Sexiest Girl of D.M.

P.S.

You say that I’m the bad breathe but who is Dennis want to kissed. Me or you? And the final is me. There you go.

My Viewpoints about the Letter

  

             I dare, most of us are fond of writing different types of letter, oftentimes a friendly type. But when I first discerned the word choices in the above letter, I can’t believe that such letter would exist. And as I go on reading, should I say “Ah… this letter needs to be copy read…” and that exactly how it goes.

             Awesome! That was my initial feedback about this letter. Mind you, not because of the splendid word choices, but because of the erroneous sentence structures and language rules. In other words, profuse wrong grammars and word choices totally congested the letter. Well, undeniably the recipient of this letter would really have a hard time reading and understanding what the letter is all about.  In order for the addressee not to get bewildered with this, the letter must undergone copy reading. Hopefully this would really help me doing this since I am a copy reader of the school publication. Providentially I was able to come up with a copy-edited letter below. The grammars are scrutinized and corrected accordingly, the punctuations are checked, adapted words from Filipino language were omitted and the text was fully-furnished as a whole.

          Written below is my copy-edited version of the letter. As you can see, evidently the grammars improved and when read, it sounds better and more pleasant that before. Although the technicalities were corrected, the thought and essence of the letter are still sealed with it. Hope this would help the addressee further understand the content of the letter.

                                                                                                                   October 1996

Dear Marije,

            I’m not in one way or another astounded about the reason why Dennis left you. There’s no other reason behind but your plump body. At first, I was taken for granted that Dennis will be in love with me but sooner I realized that he just cannot bear to be with you any longer since form the very start, Dennis could not stand your course of habit of arbitrating with his actions and activities and constantly asking where is he going.

            In relation to that, he always gets reluctant whenever I’m with him. He even asked you to work out to keep your body fit, but you extremely abhor it, thinking that you are what Jose Marie Chan is referring in his single “Beautiful Girl.”

                       

            Even you got the most gorgeous look (if that's what you're thinking), you don’t have the right to call me anyway you want just to insult my personality since I never call you that way even when Dennis is here or not. But if that’s what you really want, well I don’t have any choice but to call you such.

            After all, there’s no any valid reason for you to blame Dennis upon leaving you with a broken heart and having myself as his love interest, because I am sexier that you are. And your looks are closely similar to that of Ike Lozada if he’ll be a girl.

                                                                                              Love,
                                                                                              The Sexiest Girl of D.M.

PS:
              You said that I have a bad breath, but whom among the two of us wanted to be kissed by Dennis, me or you? Who else, of course that’s me. There you go.